10 Protagonist Mistakes New Fantasy Writers Make
Jed Herne
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Avoid these mistakes and you'll boost your chances of writing a great main character. Read Kingdom of Dragons: https://jedherne.com/kingdom โฒ๏ธ TIMESTAMPS: 00:00 - Introduction 00:33 - Lacking emotional truth 03:18 - Weak challenges 06:33 - No attempt to see them from antagonist's perspective 07:45 - One-dimensional 11:30 - Not describing through their lens 15:04 - Seeing plot as separate from character 17:02 - Weak introduction 19:11 - Hype without action 21:01 - Weak goals 23:27 - Doesn't solve the climax โ๏ธ MY FREE WRITING ADVICE BOOK: Get my free book: '5 Lessons That Transformed My Writing': https://jedherne.com/lessons ๐ BUILD BETTER WRITING HABITS: Join my Easy Writing Habits course: https://easywritinghabits.com/ ๐ MY NEWSLETTER: Get a free fantasy story when you sign up to my free, fortnightly author newsletter: https://bit.ly/jednewsletter ๐ MY BOOKS: Across the Broken Stars: https://jedherne.com/acrossthebrokenstars The Thunder Heist: https://jedherne.com/thethunderheist/ Fires of the Dead: https://jedherne.com/firesofthedead ๐ฎ MY VIDEO GAME: Siege of Treboulain: https://www.choiceofgames.com/siege-of-treboulain/ ๐จ MY FAVOURITE WRITING TOOLS: Freewrite Traveller (distraction-free writing laptop): https://getfreewrite.com/?rstr=6485 - use this affiliate link for a 5% discount. MailerLite (best email newsletter software for authors): https://www.mailerlite.com/a/awmq7yimghg9 ProWritingAid (editing software that helped a lot with my early books): https://prowritingaid.com/?afid=4301 ๐ง ABOUT ME: Hi! My name's Jed. I'm a fantasy author with three published novels and a bestselling video game. On this channel, I draw from my 10+ years of writing experience to help you become a better writer. ๐ฌ CONNECT WITH ME: Follow me on Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/jedherne/ Send me an email: jed(at)jedherne.com (Note: I don't always get a chance to reply to every email. However, I do my best to read as many of them as possible, and it's my preferred method of communication.)
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